商务英语考试(BEC)写作备考指南

　　与此同时，试题结合商务实战的特点，要求文章必须包含特定信息点，或者是通过提供信息源，以及考题中的标注，规定考生写作的具体范围和内容。所以审题是关键，所有已知条件都必须充分利用，换言之，如果遗漏已知条件，就会因信息表达不完整而导致失分。以下是对我的一名学员习文进行点评。PART ONEYou have been informed that next Wednesday your company's computer system will be closed down so that improvements can be made.Write an email to all staff in your department: saying what time on Wednesday the system will be closed down suggesting how staff should prepare for this saying how the system will be better after the improvements Write 40--50 words 学生作文：From: Jenny XuTo: All StaffDate: 5 April 2009Subject: Computer SystemI want to tell you that our Intranet based on Linux will be closed next Wednesday at 10 o’clock.. I want to suggesting that you should save all your important documents. The computer system will be faster because we will use a newer SAP system. The new system is according to ISO900 and we will benefit from that. 作文解析：

　　BEC作文解答时，审题非常重要。题目中给出的要求就好比是解代数题中已知条件，都要用到。小作文处理的时候，大家不妨可以把每一个已知条件扩写成一句句句子，同时兼顾句子之间的连接。

　　通常学生犯的错误是：

　　1. 漏掉题中给出的已知条件。

　　2. 给出的已知条件没有表达清楚，用词过于口语化，没有条理，暴露出语言功底薄弱。

　　3. 切忌过于花哨的发挥，多说多错。

　　这篇学生的作品是比较典型的案例。作者有一定的英语表达能力和工作经验，但文章中所暴露出来的不足也是明显的。写作不能从细处下笔，而是先要搭建框架。以这篇习文为例，作者在具体语言的表达的雕琢上可圈可点，比如说第一个句子中based on引导的过去分词做后置定语，但是显而忘记了这篇文章的主要目的，那就是通知同事公司电脑系统要升级，但update这个词始终没有在文章中出现，因此读下来以后，可能同事还不是非常清楚，为什么computer system will be closed down, 尽管后面提到了improvement，总让人觉得有些如鲠在咽，言之不尽;因此，思路不清晰是这篇习文最大的问题。

　　此外，本文还有以下一些问题：

　　1. 有些用词过于口语化，比如说，文章开头, I want to tell you, 文中you should save这样的用语;

　　2. 建议Linux, 将SAP, ISO900等唬人术语统统除去，诚然BEC涉及到基本的商务知识，但是真正考核的还是语言功底，语用能力;商务知识好比是盖浇饭里面的小炒而已。

　　3.里面还有一个明显的语法错误，I want to suggesting….，当然阅卷者不会刻意去搜寻语法错误，而是综合考量语法得分，但由于小作文篇幅较短，那么这个错误就显得非常明显。范文：Please be informed that our computer system will be closed next Wednesday at 12 o'clock for system upgrade. The closure will last for at least two hours. Make sure that you have saved all your documents before that time. The whole system will run on a new server, much faster than the current one. PART TWOl You work for PJT Ltd, a manufacturing company. You need more staff in your department and your line manager has asked you to write a report explaining why.l Look at the information below, on which you have already made some handwritten notes.l Then, using all your handwritten notes, write your report.l Write 120-140 words.学生作文：The purpose of this report is to explain why we need more staff in our department.We compare the number of staff in our department between 2001 and 2003, it only increased five staff. But the average number of ordered units grow up from 200000 to 400000 between 2001 and 2003. Our sales department has announced a big new order from an international company recently. It will bring us much more workload. And the annual holiday increased to 5 weeks per year. That means that we have more workload and less working days.If we had more staff the order should be on time. We should save our company’s reputation. And the workflow will be improved.